Dark Shadowz extended mini story (A1)- by Nat

Well, for assignment one of Dark shadowz I kinda went a tiny bit overboard with my "mini" story. I ended up having to cut it down to two paragraphs, but for those of you who are interested, I have posted the full version here ^_^

Cadet Jonathan Brown tread through the forest cautiously, taking care to conceal the sound of his heavy leather boots crushing the dry, decomposing leaves below his feet. He was on his usual rounds- patrolling the forests for any sign of escapees from the nearby female detainee centre. On this particular night, Jonathan was exceptionally irritated due to the drama slowly brewing in the court of King Harrison II.

Ever since King Harrison the first had most courageously taken the throne from the cowards who had called themselves the royal family, trouble had been stirring within the borders of Jonathan’s homeland. As soon as the new king had taken the throne, he drastically changed the laws and way of life within the nation. King Harrison stripped women of all rights, labelling them as dirty hags with no purpose but for the production of more men to fight in the many wars he had started to claim more land, and grow a glorious empire. Of course, these actions had sparked outrage among the general public. Jonathan remembered a particular history lesson from his schooldays, in which a classmate of his had the nerve to question the actions of his glorious ruler, even implying that women should be treated with respect. The last that Jonathan had heard of the boy was his screaming as he was dragged out of the classroom and down the long, white corridor by a soldier who had been supervising the class.

King Harrison I had set up a string of female detention centres throughout the country. The purpose of these centres was to keep women under control, and to provide an environment in which clothing, weapons and soldiers could easily be produced. Of course, not all of the residents were fully grown. Almost half of the room in these centres was occupied by young girls, knowing no life but the grey metal walls and dirty classrooms within the centre. However, Jonathan felt no pity for the female population. He took joy in seeing terrified girls desperately fleeing from their prison and attempting to dodge his expertly fired bullets. A memory of a chase that took place three days ago surfaced in Jonathan’s mind, the gory details making his body squirm with pleasure.

Suddenly, the young cadet was brought back to his senses as he heard the creaking of wood from beyond the thick foliage surrounding him. Putting the stalking skills he had learned in school into action, Jonathan slowly moved towards the source of the noise, making sure the dense vegetation concealed his position. Eventually, Jonathan came across a clearing in which a decrepit old bridge was slowly submitting to decay. Jonathan had come across this clearing many a time during his rounds, yet this time something was different. On top of the bridge was a girl, basking in the moon’s rays. She seemed totally oblivious to the imminent danger that she was in. The cold light of the moon seemed to reflect off her pale skin, and the light breeze made her charcoal hair and midnight blue gown flutter with obscene grace.

Jonathan carefully drew his pistol, and aimed the weapon at the back of her head. However, as he pulled the trigger and braced himself for the loud booming gunfire, Jonathan realised nothing had happened, and the girl was still standing in the moonlight. Jonathan cursed at himself, instantly catching the attention of the mysterious girl. She gasped in terror and jumped from the bridge, only to be tackled to the ground seconds later, her screams echoing throughout the forest. A swift blow to the back of the girl’s head knocked her out cold, and Jonathan was left wondering what to do with her temporarily vacated body. He could’ve taken her back to the centre, but Jonathan decided that this girl had committed the same crime as the other females killed in their futile efforts to escape. Suddenly, two coils of rope sitting in the water caught the cadet’s attention, and an idea sprang into his twisted and corrupted mind.

Ten minutes later, Cadet Jonathan Brown walked away from a limp, but breathing body suspended from a rotting bridge by two sturdy ropes attached to her wrists. The unconscious girl’s head was lulling forward, and her legs were swaying in the wind. Jonathan chuckled to himself as he walked away into the forest- the girl was in for quite a surprise when she awoke.
Thanks for reading! :D

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Wow that's an amazing short story. I feel so bad for the women that have to live like that and that Cadet, RAWR!!!

You're an amazing writer

Thanks! I'm pretty sad I had to cut out so much, but I guess it makes it interesting when you've only read the short version, and then come here and read the whole back story ^_^

SmileyNat wrote:
Thanks! I'm pretty sad I had to cut out so much, but I guess it makes it interesting when you've only read the short version, and then come here and read the whole back story ^_^

You should have made the font SOOO TINY that it then looked to be only 2 paragraphs

Love the story, You should post the entry with it I <3 pretty photos!

Lol! And thankyou

I'll post the pic now

Wow, that's really good but that Cadet disturbs me, what a misogynist!

Thats such a good story! And so creative! You're an amazing writer!

Thankyou!

Georgie- Don't blame Jonathan! lol. He's only that way because he grew up in that environment and was raised by soldiers/teachers pressing bad beleifs into his mind- kind of like brainwashing him I suppose. (Although I still do find him pretty creepy too lol XD )

Smiley - This is very well written - I would have accepted the entry this length hehe it's not as long as I was envisioning it originally, so if you wanted to, you could edit your entry with this story :-)

Awesome! Thanks Beech :D