Hair Drawing Attempt

So I've been trying out a few new methods of hair drawing, and here is the result. It originally started out as Jillie's tutorial, then I realised it didn't work for me so I added my own flair to it. What do you think of it? Please give me some honest opinions, and any constructive criticism.
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Not really happy with the bun?

I think it's really good!

I would say, make sure the really blunt, sharp ends, well, add more hairs to those to make them look more like hair and less like a drawing. Also, add more dark in the middle of the bun, and brighter highlights to the sides of it, and to portions of the fringe.

That's all I got. :D Good job!